Black Inside My Heart

Lalaith · Feb 14, 2007

This was my first and only true poem. I'm really bad at it but I needed to write one and I came up with this. Sorry if it's not good enough but I decided to post it anyway, ^^.

When the night comes it is all black;

Black like the shadows of fear on a tormented heart,

Black like shattered dreams and souls ripped apart.

I feel the lack…

The lack of bright light

In the middle of the cold night.

And I fear the darkness outside.

I fear the unknown

Beyond the depths of that dark pitch black;

That black from which I hide,

Although deep down inside

I know that those blurry shapes I see

Couldn’t ever harm me.

Yet I fear the nothingness hidden in the dim;

The cold, the dark void within

My veins and my soul,

Whenever the sun goes down

And dusk takes over the world.

I fear black and what it means to me…

The grief inside an empty heart

In lack of joy and glee.

A cold heart, dark and vain.

The mysteries behind an anguished soul

Drenched in Havoc and pain.

The chaos inside a maimed mind

Hollow, in wreckage and insane.

And I fear to feel that way,

To have my dreams shattered one day.

I fear to feel empty inside,

To let myself go with the tide.

I fear to have my soul ripped apart…

I fear to feel black… inside my heart.

Geer · Feb 14, 2007

It's a good poem. I liked it.

Lalaith · Feb 14, 2007

Aww, Thank you so much. I'm so glad you liked it. I was very insecure about it because poetry is not my field although I like to read it.

Thanks!!!

Eternally Yours · Feb 25, 2007

It is really good. Why is it your last poem? You ought to keep writing cause you'll only get better and better. Not to mention it really helps with dealing with your emotions. You have a lot of potinential.

IBeatSephiroth · Feb 25, 2007

Thats one awsome poem! (I don't really know whta else to say but that...)

Jing · Feb 25, 2007

So yes.. i don't comment much on other people's work, but i decided to say something after this one because it is better then you make it out to be. It is a good poem, it meets all the criteria for a poem, and it kept me interested at the same time. thats all that really matters isn't it? If people like what you write, then in my own mind i believe that tells you to keep on writing, And i also believe that if people like what you write, then it must be good. That being said, I liked it. I would love to see more of your work in the future.

Lalaith · Feb 26, 2007

Really, really? Yay!!! Thanks to you all, it's great to know that you liked it.

I love writting but I usually don't write poetry because rhymming is a bit difficult.

Now a few words to each of you, first of all thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment, it means a lot ^^.

Eternally yours- Thank you so much for your encouragement. I'm glad you believe I can make more poems and improve. What I really liked about writting this poem was that I could write something darker, it was interesting to search some dark thoughts in me. I don't usually have them, lol.

IBeatSephiroth- Yayness, you said more than enough. Thank you, I'm very happy you liked it. ^^

Jing: Wow, Thanks! I feel flattered, it was very nice of you to leave a comment on my poem. The best thing about writting something is to see our work appreciated or having constructive Criticism. It helps a lot to improve. Plus I've read some of your poems (I haven't read them all yet, sorry) and you are good.

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I'll try to make another one and see what I can do.

Thanks!!!