V - Eternal Death

[Jing]

Darkness dancing,
Eyes closed tight,
Almost sleeping,
Dead with fright.

Body shaking,
Fingers numb,
Thoughts are stuck,
On whats to come

Heavy breathing,
Itchy skin,
All goes blank,
When darkness thins.

Nothin left,
When light arrives,
Nothing left
But lonely skies

And in the end,
When time is gone,
We read the writting,
Which we were on ..

...IS ETERNAL...

 

[Eternally Yours]

No one ever commented on this o.o Wow... That was really good. I like how the first stanza spells out dead. I dont know if you did that on purpose but yeah..I can tell how you were feeling back then yoh..It was a dark time for us wasnt it?
It gave me chills to think about last July..

 

[Katsu]

Yoh, the way you set the poem up and only capitalized certain words was very well done. It rymns very well and has a nice tone...I like it...